Sam is a 17-year-old boy who lives a seemingly normal life though he is homosexual.
But on the birthday party of a complete stranger, Barry, he has his first sexual experience which will bring changes one by one into his live full of hidden feelings.
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Short Summer
Erstellt: 27.10.2008
Letzte Änderung: 06.11.2009
Letzte Änderung: 06.11.2009
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Englisch
14861 Wörter, 2 Kapitel
14861 Wörter, 2 Kapitel
Kapitel | Datum | Andere Formate | Daten |
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~komplette Fanfic~ | V: 27.10.2008 U: 06.11.2009 |
Kommentare (2 ) 14861 Wörter |
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Kapitel 1 Short Summer | E: 27.10.2008 U: 28.10.2008 |
Kommentare (2) 4775 Wörter abgeschlossen |
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Kapitel 2 Early Winter (Spin-off) Adult | E: 22.09.2009 U: 06.11.2009 |
Kommentare (0) 10513 Wörter abgeschlossen |
10 Tage im Sommer
Von: Alive Serie: männlicher Charakter Stil: Alkoholmarker, Fineliner
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Sam
Age: 17
Haircolor: brown
Main character of this shortstory.
He's a 17-year-old, shy, pretty normal guy.
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Barry
Age: 21
Haircolor: dark brown
He's an alomost professional football-player.
Barry is tall and musculous and seems to be the typical dump football-player, but there's much more to discover ^^ -
Mike
Age: 18
Haircolor: black
Nationality: korean
He's the mysterious surprise for Sam...lol -
Simon
Age: 19
Haircolor: blond
He's a little weird, plays football and takes Sam to school everyday.
he likes to act in the background.
Though sometimes he seems to be simple-minded, he understands a lot of things.
He especially likes to help friends out in everything. -
Thom
Age: 17
Haircolor: light brown
He's Sam's best friend and a friendly guy.
Von: abgemeldet
2008-10-28T22:03:34+00:00
28.10.2008 23:03
I know, I said I would read it tomorrow, but somehow… yeah, I read it today already X’D~ and I have to say, the dictionary was needed only one time :D it was easily to understand ^^
@ Story: I like the Story :D, but I thought the ‘thing’ between Barry and Sam would gonna work, mainly after Barry invited Sam and sou, but the thingy with Mike was a nice ending though ^-^ I liked it a lot ;)
To go about grammar, sentence structure and so on I can’t really help, because of my bad English *drop* but one mistake I’ve noticed, feel free to correct me but I always thought it’s called “highs cool student” and not “highscooler”? It would be new to me ^^’
Err..yeah… anything else? Ya, the scene with Sam and Barry on the veranda XD I was smoking that time and the atmosphere, it fitted completely, it was great! *laugh*
Ou! Some more thing is, I prefer the phrase; In my _entire_ life instead of In my whole life, it’s sounds way better …I think ^^’
So.. that’s it… it was a great story ^-^ and it was a pleasure to read it! Ou and thank you, that you have brought me to read something in English XD good job Sugi :D
So, keep it up!
gosha
p.s.: sorry for my bad english again, I hope you can understand, what I have written *drop*
@ Story: I like the Story :D, but I thought the ‘thing’ between Barry and Sam would gonna work, mainly after Barry invited Sam and sou, but the thingy with Mike was a nice ending though ^-^ I liked it a lot ;)
To go about grammar, sentence structure and so on I can’t really help, because of my bad English *drop* but one mistake I’ve noticed, feel free to correct me but I always thought it’s called “highs cool student” and not “highscooler”? It would be new to me ^^’
Err..yeah… anything else? Ya, the scene with Sam and Barry on the veranda XD I was smoking that time and the atmosphere, it fitted completely, it was great! *laugh*
Ou! Some more thing is, I prefer the phrase; In my _entire_ life instead of In my whole life, it’s sounds way better …I think ^^’
So.. that’s it… it was a great story ^-^ and it was a pleasure to read it! Ou and thank you, that you have brought me to read something in English XD good job Sugi :D
So, keep it up!
gosha
p.s.: sorry for my bad english again, I hope you can understand, what I have written *drop*
Kommentar zu: Kapitel 1: Short Summer
Von: abgemeldet
2008-10-28T18:40:23+00:00
28.10.2008 19:40
Soooo...
Hab doch länger als eine halbe Stunde gebraucht xD'
Ich fands schön geschrieben x3 Multitalent! ;D
Aufjedenfall konnt ichs mit meinen Englisch Kenntnissen gut verstehen, des is doch schonmal was =D
Story fand ich toll!
Nur ich hätt mir gewünscht, dass das mit Sam und Barry doch noch was geworden wäre.. Naja, was solls, so ein 'exotischer Asiate' ist doch auch was feines ;D
lg, deine treue Anhängerin Atsu xP <3
Hab doch länger als eine halbe Stunde gebraucht xD'
Ich fands schön geschrieben x3 Multitalent! ;D
Aufjedenfall konnt ichs mit meinen Englisch Kenntnissen gut verstehen, des is doch schonmal was =D
Story fand ich toll!
Nur ich hätt mir gewünscht, dass das mit Sam und Barry doch noch was geworden wäre.. Naja, was solls, so ein 'exotischer Asiate' ist doch auch was feines ;D
lg, deine treue Anhängerin Atsu xP <3
Kommentar zu: Kapitel 1: Short Summer